Last night I reached for you, thinking you were there but, when I opened my eyes there was just the air....The tears rained down for a little while as I wondered when it would be that I would finally smile....My heart was lost in a vacuum of space and time, like a poem that just could not rhyme....I wondered aloud, why this happiness I sought, eluded me, shimmering like I ghost I could not see....And in the night, the darkness rose up and tried to take me down, convincing me that I was about to drown....But, I stubbornly clung on to a piece of my heart, convinced that there was some life left, if only a single spark....A war raged within my soul, dark with light, day with night, love with pain and I nearly gave up the fight....Yet when I woke up I realized that I wasn't even there, my whole life had been a mirage that vanished into the air! [Just had to get this one out of me. Good luck psycho analyzing this one, my friends. I made it up. So what was I trying to say here? I'm curious as to what my friends come up with out there....As usual, much love to everyone out in ADAA land!
Mirage (a poem): Last night I reached... - Anxiety and Depre...
Mirage (a poem)
Wow, I really find your poem inspiring, you are amazing with words. I interpret it as always having hope, made me think of people close to me I'd lost and miss so much. Coming through the struggles and not giving up. Thanks for sharing. 
Love your reply. The poem has much meaning and I ran it through several of my friends before posting it. They all saw different meanings in it. I saw that as a strength, not a weakness. Let the mystery of the real meaning dangle out there like a carrot in front of a rabbit (ha-ha). C2018, thanks for you reply.
This is so good 🌈🌟🌺Keep writing- let your lovely and poetic thoughts spill from the fingertips to the blank page!
And wanted to say hi JEG!!
Hey brother....your doing some good work...you know the best writers often have suffered from depression and it's that despair, and then our joy, and our great sensitivity that makes us good writers....
Being a writer myself....I wanted to ask you if you have looked into a poetry class so you can learn to present your poems in a poetry or prose format, there is some cool classes on-line....you know what I mean....the line after line kind of thing... it makes for easier reading and also controls the flow of the words like a song. You want that opening, then the bridge, the chorus, and the hook....you want it to flow when your reading it like as smooth as a clam river flows.
Your good JEG.....keep writing.... not only is it from the heart, but its cathartic and a wonderful expression of the soul.
I know how to write that way, my friend. What I don't know is how to format it on my computer so, it appears that way in print. Need help with that. What did you think about the end of this poem? Our writing club friends have suggested tbat the ending was flawed. Do you agree?
where does the poem end.... which is the last line please..
Maybe hit the space bar each time you have finished a sentence of the poem, and start putting in the breaks that way so it's like if you were posting the lyrics of a song....you know what I mean....that would keep the flow of the words and also then the writing presents itself like a poem....I hope that helps
Poetry classes sound lovely. Which ones are you in. Maybe I could tag along?
what I would do is look for some online adult ed classes that may only cost a couple of bucks and does not involve much registration. I have not had classes in this area for many many years....but it did help me....and I actually learned how to write songs from a musician friend back in the day who did studio work an had regular gigs. He was the first to turn me on to the fact that most songs were like poems really.
Wrote more than 900 songs back in the day, my friend. Still write a lot of my poems in that style. Just can't get it from my computer to the site as written. Last part of poem about waking up and realizing that his whole life had been a mirage and had vanished into the air! I liked it, others did not.....
I like the ending JEG but I haven’t even read the beginning and middle yet so I’ll have to do that.
Hi 👋 Fauxartist
hello my friend....how are you.....I just caught your message, gonna get ready and do some painting.....keeps my crazy a bit calmer
Good over here. I really need to make painting a regular like it used to be. I know it does calm forsnt it? ..I used to get so lost in my paintings. Have fun!!!
aren't you drawing still my friend?
Nope i haven’t been but I have been writing. Oh did sketches actually just this morning, nothing great.
you know constructive criticism, or subtle suggestion is not a negative.... I sense a tiny bit ...and I want you to know that would never be my intention, you never have to justify your ability or knowledge to me my friend.... I see you have talent, and as your friend, I want to lovingly encourage and nurture that, and never take what I say as a negative because it's not the kind of person I am.... I'm only trying to add input as you asked for it, and I wanted to reply with what I know. I've been writing poetry since I was in HS, and I'm in my mid sixties, now I am writing books. It doesn't mean I'm any good, just know a few tricks to the trade.
About the last line....maybe if anything.... the reader liked being in the dream, and your waking from it could end more with an ethereal kind of lazy day dream effect of wanting more. Like trying to catch smoke in a bottle, but never quite being able to grasp it...just out of reach so to speak.
Well I wrote you a pretty and long response but, my computer ate it!
We don't take offense to any advice that is offered from the heart. What I guess I am not conveying too well is that I am unable to trsnslate my actual writing style from my pen and the computer ti this site. You cannot see my actual style because I am unable to show it properly! You are a classy, awesome person and I welcome any advice you have! The other members of our group will too.
do what I do my friend.... write everything you want to that is long enough that you don't want to loose it....on MS Word.... then cut and paste it here. I have lost a volume of writing here before I finally figured that would be a good way to stop loosing my posts and comments....it helps keep the aggravation to a minimum
I will send you the repository email address later so you can deposit any finished work there and also read any of the rest of the group's work that is deposited there. I love having you in this group and look forward to collaborating directly with you on some projects. Have a blessed day, my lovely friend!
I love it but goodness I have no idea what it means, maybe deep inside you...you do know? Have a beautiful day! Love, peace, light, joy & hugs for you!
Glad to see you sharing your poems, Jeg!
Long, time no hear my friend! I have more to share too. Unfortunately, I have reached the exhausted level and need sleep. Looking forward to chatting later, my long lost, awesome friend!
It was a suicide attempts, you were hanging with your last breath but Had enough room to stand on your tippy toe and Changed your mind .you have the courage to live
JEG, beautifully done. Gave me chills. Far from the typical Roses are Red,
Violets are Blue....your poems are so deep and pack a meaningful message
each and every time. Thank you for sharing your talent. x
Lovely poem you should write everything down that you experience night or day. I have title for you journal or perhaps book? Anxiety dreaming... Love your creativity. All the best.
That is a very meaningful poem and to write something like that you must be gifted in a very special way.I'm a disabled lady in that I have to use a mobility walker to get around and After a really bad day you have lifted me up with your words.Thanks for sharing that special gift from Sandie x
I'm glad it helped you out. My friends were instrumental in getting me to open up about my problems and post a lot of these interesting poems I have bottled up inside me. Look for them more often as time is permitting for me share them. 500 kazillion uplifting & loving hugs to brighten you day, SB1!
The ending, about finding out life was just a mirage, I believe this is true! Very deep revelation. Love your words. Thank you for sharing.
People keep telling me the ending doesn't fit the rest of the poem. I'm confused about that. The point was the guy had lost himself inside his love for his girl. Once she was gone it was like he no longer existed either! Thus, his life was now nothing more than mirage. Thanks for your reply. Have a blessed day, ST.
Hi jeg. I hope your having a good day.
Tired. A long string of days in a row that I haven't got more than 6 hours of sleep per day. Only 3 3/4 hours last night. What did you think of my poem ? + How are you?
Ohhhhhh how beautiful. This is so inspiring so hopefull and it sure does make a difference in people’s life. Hope to one day read all these on a book!!
Is it about the death of someone very special to you?
It's not about death per se, it's about a girl I loved and then lost. I made it up but then realized just recently it was about a young girl named Tammy I was with for 2 1/2 years.I was 21 and she was 17 when we met. We were together until just before she turned 20. She just up and left me for another guy. I was crushed. I contemplated suicide. One day I woke up and realized that I had been into her so much that I had lost myself in her. Thus my life had become a mirage. Forgot all that until after I wrote the poem. Did you like it?
Yes it's a lovely poem
So here is my analysis: your missing someone who you love and in that time of feeling alone you had a panic attack. Eventually realizing it was a panic attack which subsided and you felt better.
Hey, buddy, did you read what I wrote to Lins345 right above you. That's one reason why I wrote it. There's another we can talk about on the pm if you want....Nice to hear from you this morning, my friend. On my computer now, so communication not a problem. Thanks for weighing in.....
I did not read that but apparently I was pretty close. Lol.
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